【帮忙改一下英语作文Astudentwhoisafreshmanthathavehadacomputer,aMPfourwhenhecomintotheuniversity.Itspendmuchmoneybuyingit.Ourclasshavehadaheateddiscussionaboutthestudents.Opinionsaredividedintotwo.think】

　　帮忙改一下英语作文

　　Astudentwhoisafreshmanthathavehadacomputer,aMPfourwhenhecomintotheuniversity.Itspendmuchmoneybuyingit.

　　Ourclasshavehadaheateddiscussionaboutthestudents.Opinionsaredividedintotwo.thinkingthestudenthavearichfamilyduringhisuniversities'lifeisbettertobuythesethings.othersholdtheoppositeopinionitisnotgoodtomakeagoodbehave.

　　Asfarasiamconcerned,thestudentshouldtakesilentattitudestwardstheproblem,andbethrifty,andstudyhard.

　　满分25,我们老师给我打了13分,我觉的不太好,可能是语法上和用词上有问题,帮忙改改,谢谢.