语法错误先不考虑的话,文章中关于希望禁烟的理由,没有能够非常有条理的说清楚,部分原因不合逻辑.不好意思比较直接点出来,因为三分之二的句子都需要进行部分改动,你是不是想表达下面的意思：

　　1、抽烟浪费钱,有害健康,举例：哮喘病人、降低患心血管类疾病概率

　　2、抽烟的人有口臭,影响交际.举例：不喜欢靠近抽烟的人,身上有怪味.

　　结论：希望禁烟

　　那你重新修改下==

　　我改就等于帮你重新写了……

　　《Smokingshouldbebannedinallpublicareas》

　　Istronglyagreedthatsmokingshouldbebannedinpublicareas.Herearemyreasons.

　　Firstofall,smokingisawasteofmoney,andharmtoourhealth.peoplewithasthmawillhaveabiggerchancetogetworseiftheyarefrequentlyexposedtosecondhandsmoke.

　　Also,smokingpeoplearemorelikelytosufferfromheart-relatedillnesses,whichisverifiedbymanyscientificevidencenow.

　　Secondly,longtermsmokersoftenhavestinkbreath.Noonelikesstinkpeople.Forexample,mostofthefriendsIknowdonotliketobefriendswithpeoplewhoalwayshasacigaretteonthemouth.EverytimeIwalkbysmokingpeople,Icouldalwayssmellhisbadbreath,whichisreallyannoying.

　　SoIwishsmokingcouldbebannedinthepublicandwecanliveinafree-second-hand-smokeworld.

　　我写得好累，再也不答作文题了……还不见得写得好……

　　嗯。就你了，O(∩_∩)O谢谢