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　　STUDYPLAN语法,搭配问题改错STUDYPLANMynameisj,IwasborninMar,l996.From2002to2008IstudiedatxxSchool,andfrom2008tonowI'matxxmiddleSchool.Iamaresponsible,Friendlyandwarmheartedperson.Ihavesomanyhobbies,suchass

　　STUDYPLAN语法,搭配问题改错

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　　Mynameisj,IwasborninMar,l996.From2002to2008IstudiedatxxSchool,andfrom2008tonowI'matxxmiddleSchool.

　　Iamaresponsible,Friendlyandwarmheartedperson.Ihavesomanyhobbies

　　,suchasswimming,skating,playingfootball,andlistentomusic.Iespeciallyliketolisteningtopunkmusic,suchassum41,simpleplan……Thesebandaregreat,

　　Inrecentyears,manyfriendsandclassmatesofminegotostudyabroad.OfcoursehavestudyIntheCanada.,FrommyfriendsandtheInternetIknowthatCanadaisabeautifulcountrywithsomanybeautifulsceneries

　　ITisnotonlygoodlearningenvironmentbutalsoownsanadvancededucationsystemandscience.ThismakesmeyearningtostudyintheCanada,wanttostudyabroad.Ithinkalsogotthesupportofyourfamily,Iaspiretolearnnotdisappointthemtomyexpectation.NowIwillentrustmyfriendtosubmitmyapplicationtotheeducationdepartmentinRichmond,BritishColumbia.

　　IfIcouldstudyinCanada,Iamplanningtomajorinnaturalscience.Ireallylikenaturalsciencesincechildhood.IknowthatCanada'snaturalscienceisaleadinginternationalstatus.Innaturalscience,Ipreferphysicsandpsychology.NowIamdrawingupastudyplan.MyplanistocompletemycoursesinseniorhighschoolinordermakefurtherprogressinmyEnglishandThroughmyhardworkwastheidealuniversitystudyofnaturalscience.

　　Myparentshaveonlyoneson,IhopeIcouldrepaythemandmymotherlandwhen

　　IfinishmystudiesIwillgobacktomycountry.Thereasonsforitareasfollows:Firstly,IamChinese,Chinaismymotherland.Secondly,IhavedutyistocomebacktotakecareofmyparentsaccordingtoChinesetradition..IbelievethatatthattimeChinamusthavefullydeveloped,whichwillprovidewithmuchbiggerspaceformetoputmytalenttogooduse.

　　StudyinginCanadawillhelpmetorealizethelife'sleap.Thanksfortakingyourtimetoreadmywords.Kindlypleaseconsidermyapplicationandgiveayoungambitionsmanachancetorealizehisdream.

　　Yourssincerelyx

　　DateAug30,2010

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　　首先第一段andfrom2008tonowI'matxxmiddleSchool.中from2008tonow用法有误：to后不能加副词,你可以改成andnowI'matxxmiddleSchool.

　　第二段andlistentomusic中listen应加ing.还有Iespeciallyliketolistening中应该把to去掉,因为当表示所喜欢的是某人的爱好时最好用likedoingsth

　　第四段ITisnotonlygoodlearningenvironmentbutalsoownsanadvancededucationsystemandscience.中notnoly,butalso用于引起并列结构也就是说only和also后都应该加相同的句子成分或句式.但你的句子中only后加的是表语,而also后加的却是谓语和宾语.你可以把is换成has然后挪到notonly的后边.还有ThismakesmeyearningtostudyintheCanada,wanttostudyabroad一句中最好用yearn原型,want前的逗号应改成and.再者

　　Ithinkalsogotthesupportofyourfamily,完全是中国式英语.句中also用于be或助动词后实义动词前.think后也不能直接加got这类过去式或过去分词.此句应改成Ialsowanttogetthesupportfromyourfamily.然后Iaspiretolearnnotdisappointthemtomyexpectation中问题很大Iaspiretolearn没问题.但想说不辜负他们的期望notdisappointthemtomyexpectation是不对的.应改成andIwillcomeuptotheirexpectationsofme.记住不管立志学习和不辜负期望是不是两件事,你总得在中间加个and吧（不能加逗号哦）.还有now后跟的句子不能用将来时应该用一般现在时（有时也可以用现在进行时）

　　第五段IfIcouldstudyinCanada,Iamplanningtomajorinnaturalscience中if引导的条件状语从句的时态是主将从现.所以应将could换成can,amplanning换成willplan.Ireallylikenaturalsciencesincechildhood一句中since是副词后面怎能加名词呢应改成sinceIwasachild.

　　这一句MyplanistocompletemycoursesinseniorhighschoolinordermakefurtherprogressinmyEnglishandThroughmyhardworkwastheidealuniversitystudyofnaturalscience.

　　中inordertodosth.为了做某事to不可省略.and后面的through应该小写并且and后面的句子缺少主语.所以先把and改成to然后加上gotomyidealuniversitytomajorinnaturalscience.还有Thereasonsforitareasfollows不好.若改成HereIwanttosharethereasonswithyou会不会更好呢?Chinaismymotherland一句改成It'sChinatosupportmeandIshouldn'tforgetherfavor会不会更好呢?Ihavedutyistocomeback一句中有了have和is两个谓语,明显错误,至少应该改成myduty或改成It'smyduty更好.最后一句giveayoungambitionsmanachancetorealizehisdream.中ambition不可数也最好不用作定语你可以改成giveayoungmanfullofambitionachancetorealizehisdream.落款在右侧你应该改成：

　　sincerely,

　　August30th,2010

　　不必写Date这个词有sincerely也不用写yours

　　希望我说的对你有帮助

2020-06-12 00:48:08

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