Thereisnodenyingthatweareeagerforgoldenchancestobesuccessfulinlife.Howevermanypeoplearenotawarethatchancesarealwaysforthosewhogetwellprepared.Ididn’trealizeituntilIwenttohighschool.
SoonafterIbecameasenioronestudentasingingcompetitionwastobeheldinschool.IlovesingingbutIwasveryshythenandhadneversungatthetopofmyvoiceinpublic.Icouldonlysingtomyselfmostofthetime.SomehowIwantedtohaveatry.WhenItalkedaboutitwithmyparentstheyinspiredmetofollowmyinnervoiceandtoldmeaslongasIgotwellpreparedIwouldmakeit.WiththeirencouragementIbecameconfidentandpracticedhardafterclass.SometimesIwouldturntomymusicteacherforhelp.WhenIfeltIwasreadythedaycame.StandingonthestageItookadeepbreathandbegantosingwithmyfullemotions.ItturnedoutthatIwonthefirstprize.
Thisexperiencehastaughtmeapreciouslessoninmylife.Ifyouarenotsuccessfulyetmostprobablyyouhaven’tbeenwellprepared.Onceyouhavechanceswillsurelyfavoryou.
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本题提示是:我们都知道“机会偏爱有准备的头脑”只有你准备好,你才能抓住机会。题目要求结合生活实例来写一篇文章,此类题目更偏向于类似记叙文写作,考生尽量写成记叙文,以减小题目难度。范文为经典的三段论式写作,第一段为总起段,第二段记叙生活经历,第三段总述全文。第一段开头Thereisnodenyingthatweareeagerforgoldenchancestobesuccessfulinlife.使用了that领导的定语从句;第二句中manypeoplearenotawarethatchancesarealwaysforthosewhogetwellprepared.首先使用了that领导的宾语从句,又使用了who领导的定语从句;第二段第一句中SoonafterIbecameasenioronestudentasingingcompetitionwastobeheldinschool.使用了after领导的时间状语从句;第四句WhenItalkedaboutitwithmyparentstheyinspiredmetofollowmyinnervoice使用了when领导的时间状语从句;第二段倒数第二句StandingonthestageItookadeepbreathandbegantosingwithmyfullemotions.使用了一个伴随状语从句;最后一段最后一句Onceyouhavechanceswillsurelyfavoryou使用了once领导的状语从句。本文短语使用也十分精彩,使用了beeagerfor渴望…,haveatry试一试,aslongas只要,turnto向…寻求帮助,turnout结果是等许多常用的短语。本文在词语上最大亮点就是副词的使用,如使用了However然而,Soon不久,Somehow不知怎么的,Sometimes有时,这些副词的使用,使得文章的句型转换更加自然,不会使文章显得过于累赘,用的恰到好处。总结:记叙文写作首先要注意文章结构,尽量使文章结构清晰,其次注意从句不要使用过于频繁,以免使文章过于累赘。
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