OnepossibleversionBeinganexcellentstudentwithall-rounddevelopmentLiHuahasbeenhonoredasStaroftheCampus.Hespendsmostofhissparetimedoingvolunteerworkatweekendshelpingtheoldorthedisabledwhichshowshischaracterofresponsibilityandkindness.Withgreatintelligencediligencegoodlearningmethodsandpositiveattitudeshestudieswellinallthesubjectsandoftenranksamongthetopthreeintheclass.Afterclassheisactiveintheplaygroundmusicclubsandsomecommunities.Thesporthelikesmostisplayingbasketballandhehasservedasleaderofourschoolbasketballteamfortwoyears.HealsotakesgreatdelightinChineseoperaaswellassingingpopsongs.Besideshetakesanactivepartinallsortsofsocialpractices.InawordLiHuaisanoutstandingstudentwhohassetagoodexampleforus.(131words)
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分析要求可知,根据最新颁布的《关于加强和改进普通高中学生综合素质评价的意见》,你校举办校园之星(StaroftheCampus)评选活动,你班李华获此殊荣,介绍李华的综合素质情况。短文应该用一般现在时,第一人称。词数120左右,不要太多或太少。尽量多使用较高级的词汇和短语以及固定句式,注意句子之间的连贯性。作文打分重点关注文体,篇章结构,语言表达的连贯性和地道性。
【亮点说明】文中用了一些高级的短语和句式。如:which引导的非限制性定语从句,takesgreatdelightin、takesanactivepartin、setagoodexamplefor等都很不错。
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提纲类作文。