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  我写的这篇英文都有什么错误?IwouldprobablychooseajobwithhighincomewhenIfinisheduniversity,althoughit’sprobablynotmyfavoritejob.Thattime,Ineedmuchmoneytoimprovemylife,Ineedtobuyacar,Ineedtobuyaho

  我写的这篇英文都有什么错误?

  IwouldprobablychooseajobwithhighincomewhenIfinisheduniversity,althoughit’sprobablynotmyfavoritejob.Thattime,Ineedmuchmoneytoimprovemylife,Ineedtobuyacar,Ineedtobuyahouse,andIalsoneedtolearndifferentkindofskillstomakealivingandtogetenoughworkingexperience,sothattime,Ican’tchoosejobbutjobchooseme.

  WhenIgotenoughworkingexperienceandgotenoughmoneytomakealiving,Iwouldchoosemyfavoritejob,nomatterwhatisthenumberoftheincome,becausemoneyisnolongermymainaim,spiritismoreimportantthanmoney,Idon’tneedmoneyanymore,Ineedhappiness,Ineedtoworkandlivegladly.

  写的不是很认真,可能错误很多,可以把我的错误指出并说出原因吗?

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2020-06-21 00:09
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李瑞琴

  “withhighincome”:withhighpayment(income是相对于自己来说,而payment是相对于job来说.)

  “whenIfinisheduniversity”:whenIfinishmyschool或用whenIgraduatefromuniversity(后者更正式.而且你的时态用错了.)

  “althoughit’sprobablynot”:althoughitmaynotbe(尽可能一句话中同一单词不要重复.)

  “Thattime”:Atthattime(你用的是Chinglish.)

  “Ineedmuchmoney”:Ishouldneedmuchmoremoney(情态动词的加入语气更委婉.)

  “Ineedtobuyacar,Ineedtobuyahouse”:Ihavetosupportthecar,thehouse(词汇或句型要多样.)

  “differentkindof”:differentkindsof(已经是different了,肯定不是一种.)

  “,sothattime”:.(前面要用句号了,上一句话已经说完了不是么?而且你这样一句话,前后没有很强的逻辑联系啊,实在想用到Icannotchoosejobbutjobchoosesme,就把它放到前面去,第一句话的后面.myfavoritejob.Nowaway,notwechoosesjobbutjobchoosesus.)

  “WhenIgotenoughworkingexperienceandgotenoughmoneytomakealiving”:Aftergettingenoughexperienceandmoney(拖沓.)

  “nomatterwhatisthenumberoftheincome”:Nomatterhowmuchoftheincome(钱...用howmuch)

  “Idon’tneedmoneyanymore”:Idonotneedthatmuchmoremoney

  总结一下,可能就像你自己说的你没很认真的写,整篇文章句式单一,用词单调重复,逻辑有些混乱,基本在初中水平.改到后来我很想重新写一篇.第二段真的值得重新再写,同学.

2020-06-21 00:11:37

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