MyRolemodel文章纠错,用英文的（包括两方面,1是文章构造2是语法用词之类）要求800左右MyRolemodelIhaveadream,actuallytwodreams,whicharecloselyrelated.MyfirstdreamistogotoAmericaandlearndancinginada

　　MyRolemodel文章纠错,用英文的（包括两方面,1是文章构造2是语法用词之类）要求800左右

　　MyRolemodel

　　Ihaveadream,actuallytwodreams,whicharecloselyrelated.MyfirstdreamistogotoAmericaandlearndancinginadancingschoolwhichissmallbutfamousforagraduate,GeorgeMinguswhohasplayedleadingrolesinthedancebusiness.

　　GeorgeMingusisfromaghettoinSanDiego.Hewassmallinhishighschoolday,buthadvitalityashighasanyotherboysforplayingbasketball.Hewasabasketballclubmember.Hisfriendinhighschooloftensaid,”Hecanplayasifhehasfourarmsandfourlegs.”Hecouldmovefasterthananyotherplayersthen.

　　Hewascuriousnotjustinbasketballbutindancinghishighschoolage.Georgeaskedhisfatherifhecangotoaschoolfordancing,buthisfamilycouldnotaffordtheschoolfee.Hethoughtthatheshouldhaveworkedtomakemoneyforschool,andstaredhisjobasearlyashegraduatedfromhighschool.Hefoundahardbutyoucouldearnquitelargemoneyjobandenteredadancingschoolayearlater.

　　Peoplecouldnothavebecomefamousdancerunlesstheyhadbeeninanexpensivedancingschoolatthattime.Otherwise,theyshouldfindagooddancingcoachinNewYorkCitywherealotofpeoplevisitBroadwaytheaters.ButGeorgemanagedenteracheapschoolinSanDiego.

　　Themorehepracticeddancinghard,themorehegoteagertobeabetterdancer.Finally,hewasadmittedofhisdancingskillsbyamanwhocametotheschoolforscouting.HehadbecomewellknowninadancemeetinCalifornia.Notonlytheteachersofhisschoolandthescoutingdirectorwereattractedbyhisenergeticdancingandenthusiasticaboutdancing.ThescoutpersonpromisedGeorgetotakehimtoNewYork

　　是要纠错的这篇文章不是我写的是让改错的文章全部都有错要用英文把这篇文章改正过来

　　主要分两个问题来写

　　第一，写文章主要结构哪里不好，先指出来，在改正，并说明为什么。

　　第二，找一些小错误，比如文法，或用词不当的，包括介词不当，时态的错误等，先指出在改正，在说为什么

　　写好的有追加分我的分都追加了也可以主要是着急三楼的写的不错有没有更加完善的改错的要用英文写的